Late last year, John F. Egbert (yes, the guy behind the protest of AG Bell and the Deaf Bilingual Coalition — see also here) self-published MindField, a novel about a mysterious strain of meningitis unleashed by terrorists that leaves untold numbers of Americans deaf.
I’d bought my copy several months ago, but waited until I had a free summer moment to read. Hearing about positive reviews (here and here) that spurred several friends to buy their copy and one friend who’d already dived into his, I moved it to the top of my to-read list. Now I wish I’d waited longer.
Perhaps the biggest letdown is being led to believe, even hope, that a deaf person writing about deaf people could actually do it: write a great American novel in which the complexity of the deaf community is finally fairly represented, or, at the very least, portrayed in an innovative manner. Sure, the premise alone is enough to lift those hopes sky-high.
By page six I wanted to throw the book in the trash.
Though usually I have a 100-page rule in which authors have a hundred pages with which to capture my attention, the spelling and grammar errors and typos alone were frustrating enough without the stilted and artificial dialogue style and the unimaginative wording that felt cribbed from a dozen other conspiracy theory novels and stitched together here.
There’s a reason for the editing process that publishing houses use; by choosing the self-publishing route, Egbert did himself and his audience a grave disservice here.
English 101 gripes aside, it does get easier to ignore these mistakes as one keeps reading. Usually that’s a good thing for people who really want to sit back and enjoy a good yarn. Unfortunately, for this reader, who desperately wanted to root for a deaf author, it just made the other weaknesses of the book more glaring.
As a story, the book’s substance is spread thin.
There is zero character development. Each character serves a minute purpose; that one became deaf, that one’s a mom of deaf kids, that one’s an audist, that one’s a clueless politician or militiaman, that one’s money-hungry. Further than that purpose, there’s nothing remarkable about any of the characters.
Egbert fails to dig into the psyche of any of his creations, even with Nathan, one of the apparent protagonists who eventually becomes deaf. The narration of his sudden deafness is filled with cliche and both does nothing to move the story forward and nothing to tell us about who he is as a person. Often, the things they say are only bits of information Egbert wants the reader to know but couldn’t seem to figure out a way to show (hence, the ASL 101 lecture one teacher of the deaf gives her mother-in-law).
Usually, when stories have little in the way of character development, that means the story is found in the plot or theme itself. But here as well, MindField is weak. In the first half or so, terrorists unleash meningitis; martial law ensues and deaf people are interned in camps with cute government-inspired labels. In the latter part, people, laymen and politicians both (including the new president of the US with the interesting surname: Jordan), try and figure out the “right” thing to do with this newly deafened population.
What exposition exists is abbreviated, and either sounds as if it’s cobbled together from tourist brochures of other countries (i.e. when an American embassy is described, baroque architecture is mentioned, but nothing about the character’s impressions of being in that setting) or as if chapters had been cribbed from pre-cold war history textbooks.
There are also entire chapters that do nothing for the story and should have been left out entirely (for example, chapter 40, in which a public relations guy shows the woman in charge of the camps posters used to advertise the camps; she chooses the one she likes and the guy thanks her and she congratulates him on a job well done. The relevance of the chapter is never revealed).
There are continuity mistakes as well; deaf people who want no part of internment camps manage to flee to Canada and Mexico even though the borders to both countries have been closed a few chapters before; entire characters are elaborately introduced and then never appear in the book again, their relevance unexplained. One character is said to call another “doctor” for the first time, when, in fact, he has rarely ever called him anything but.
Perhaps the biggest continuity mistake is dropping the terrorism thread altogether. A small town in Montana is targeted in order to contain the virus that deafens people. But if it’s really a terror attack, why contain it? Furthermore, is any place in America today really insular enough that such a containment is even plausible? That is, after all, what happened to the signing deaf population in Martha’s Vineyard and why the tuberculosis groom was such a newsworthy story earlier this year; Americans today are simply too mobile.
We very briefly meet the terrorists, but their motives are never explained, and the victim-mentality of the terrorized never appears throughout the book. Odd, since in a post 9-11 world, we should have plenty of emotional landscape available for mining.
Instead, the rest of the book attempts a scattered collage of amateur Deaf studies awkwardly meshed with Big Brother-type government infiltrated by evil oralists armed with rifles.
Emotional recognition software, in which people’s feelings can be visually read on their faces, appears repeatedly. But like the questions about the nature of bioterrorism, Egbert’s characters never answer the question of why this software is important. It’s a frustrating scenario of so tantalizingly close, and yet so far.
There is an annoying tendency to focus on the physical and technical descriptions of people and technology. Instead of finding out what a person’s heart is like or what someone else’s first impression might be, we find out he has brown hair and stands 5′10″.
A government official is finally given the budget he wants and lo and behold he receives “a high end MacIntosh, a thirty-inch-wide full color Epson printer, and a top-notch scanner; and camera equipment along with a T-2 high speed Internet connection.” In a novel of Tom Clancy proportions, these descriptions might serve a purpose; without them, the reader cannot hope to understand later developments of plot. But here in MindField, they’re superfluous.
One interesting note is that there is almost zero auditory description throughout the book. This is kind of intriguing, since it was, after all, written by a deaf person. Whether thats an intentional omission or an unconscious oversight, I don’t know, but considering the book is ostensibly geared toward a paradigm shift in the minds of hearing readers, I question the wisdom of that omission. It could even have been fertile ground for a little sensory play in terms of the one character who went deaf later in the story.
Perhaps the best way to read this text is as a philosophical treatise on deafness in the vehicle of fiction. Egbert’s best points come out here: Halley Weber, the government official in charge of education whose daughter is hard of hearing wavers over whether her choice of oral education and cochlear implant (which wasn’t all that successful) is the right one, and further, whether the plan she outlines for the three million newly deaf Americans is appropriate. Though Egbert doesn’t explore that as much as he could have, those portions of the story are easily the strongest.
Unfortunately, instead of turning this into a human suspense novel at this point (which is something the best thriller novels do), Egbert veers toward the conspiracy theory thread, portraying Halley as a helpless brainwashed victim of the corporate powermongers who lead AG Bell.
In fact, this is where the story could have used some focus or some consistent purpose; in the epilogue and in the author’s notes, the overall intent of the book is to purportedly serve as a tipping point (allusion definitely intended - the Gladwell influence is too heavy to miss) through which the hearing world will understand the barriers they have placed in the way of deaf people, who are actually just fine and not deformed, thank you very much.
But instead of continuing this subversive intent through human stories (there is no “always been deaf” character in the story, much to my disappointment), the book ends up a thinly veiled assault on what is sometimes esoterically called “the organization” and, at other times, explicitly named as the AG Bell organization.
A well-written anti-AG Bell narrative would have been interesting to read; this ends up being oversimplified argument against oralism and an unjustified plea that sign language is a “visual symphony” and children deserve it. The term “unjustified” doesn’t mean I disagree — in fact, there were many moments when I almost rooted for the anti-oralist characters downright. It just means Egbert barely glossed over any explanation of why oralism-only is a bad idea and focused his attentions on painting AG Bell and its supporters as evil archetypes.
For a book that’s supposed to spread understanding in the minds of clueless hearing readers, that was a severe misstep. Now they have no reason to understand why oralism-only isn’t always a great idea, and they do have reason to think deaf people, even the ones intelligent enough to write a book, are incapable of making a reasoned or convincing argument.
For deaf readers, that’s just fuel for the divisive fire we find among factions within the deaf community; ironically there is a chapter where a pro-ASL character rails about the inability of the deaf community to represent a united front about what is best for deaf children and people everywhere.
The assault on AG Bell notwithstanding, there’s just too much in this book, not just in terms of deaf studies, but also in terms of continuity and plausibility that undermines its noble intent:
- The explanation of ASL is linguistically questionable,
- the neuroscience theory repeatedly espoused within is also questionable (one character recommends learning ASL underwater to shut out auditory input — because the brain apparently can only focus on one sensory input at a time, learning is facilitated this way. This reasoning is both untrue and inadvertently supports AG Bell/AudioVerbal’s justification for their auditory-only methods.)
- The deaf experience is not realistically portrayed (Egbert encourages “more dramatic lip movements” for easier lipreading, for example. Or take, for instance, the hearing parent who suddenly says he regrets his decision to implant his deaf child. Aside from being a rarity - if such an instance even exists - the hearing parent never fully explains why implants are so horrible. Such a miraculous change of mind deserves some explanation, no?).
- The math doesn’t add up; apparently only three million Americans are deafened, a mere fraction of the number that already exist today. Yet this causes concern about national economy and security, not to mention widespread panic and martial law. The reasons for these anxieties are never fully explained.
In sum, there’s zero complexity, but tons of unnecessary rhetorical flourishes, inconsistency, and bias. Even the evil oralists/audists are not given a chance to show their human depravity; authorial interventions and an inability to show instead of tell prevent this from happening.
Perhaps the greatest irony about this book that is supposed to teach the world that there is no essential difference between deaf and hearing people is that it polarizes the difference even more.
Egbert does make a valiant attempt; this is why I’m saddened by this book more than I’m angry about the waste of my book money. Early in the book, he writes one beautiful line that I think is worth sharing:
Ultimately, the only thing that ensures freedom is unhindered communication.
Funnily enough, that line appears in the midst of a discussion about appropriate government control, and has nothing to do with deaf people. My hopes for the success of this book flared briefly after reading that.
Nevertheless, instead of staying focused on this one concept throughout the book, the story spazzes in many different directions, clearly being influenced by last fall’s Gallaudet protests, and at one point directly referencing them in the present tense, an odd anachronism in a book that’s supposed to be set in 2010.
Egbert, in several places, confuses the difference between deaf and hearing with the same difference between humanity and animal that many hearing people have historically “observed” about deaf people. In this sense, he fails to create a paradigm shift in MindField and instead and just writes a book that says, “Yo, hearing people. Right back at ya.”
The grossest example of this elision comes, again, from Nate, the newly-deafened character, towards the end of the book. As he waxes poetic about how wonderful it is to be deafened, he wonders, “Were the deaf always more intuitive, more compassionate than those who could hear?”
Apparently not.
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